Question by Marguerite: A Poem – The Vision Quest – Any comments?
Traversing crystalized frost beneath his feet
Attentive wanderer, sure-footed, incomplete
The Mother yielding, displaying her willing zest
Each step closer to gifts of the vision quest
The soaring eagle confirms acknowledgement
Tipping its feathered wing, winking contentment
Observing through keen eyes, gaining inner strength
Lineage promise kept adding spiritual breadth
Journey accomplished to much satisfaction
Walking proudly forward without distraction
A boy, adolescent, departing from youth
The wanderer forever honored by truth
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Answer by larouxeblack
I love how it flow es. do you have a poetic soul or is the world round?
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Not bad at all. Shows promise.
this is a good one, keep up the good work!!
Why did I think of the mummy of the ‘Ice Man’ when I read this? The terrain is right, but the ‘Ice Man’ wasn’t a youth.
I understand this poem very well, but does it not work equally well in being a poem of humankind’s evolution, and not just a ‘vision quest’? Mankind’s journey upwards, as the youth journeys upwards on his vision quest…proving to be a man.
When a poem has several meanings which could be valid(each one), then truly, it is a remarkable poem! Bravo!
Elysabeth Faslund…Poemhunter.com
Very proud of your son. I like it and I knew it was about a child when read the fourth line. Very good.
You always use meter and rhyme very well in your poetry–very pleasing cadence.
Great!
This is a very good poem. I love the message of the poem. Indeed you have a great talent. You could be a good philosopher banking on your thoughts and wisdom. Congratulations for a job well done.
God Bless!
Have a great day.
Wow i always love to read your poems as they are always so descriptive and have beautiful meanings .. Your really quite good.good. ,
I really like your poems… They have such fluidity and always make me feel like I am there. Sort of like a “Pans Labyrinth” type feel to it. Good Job…
Love it!